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Re: Fox on the Plain
This is definitely intriguing; it makes me want to know why Lyle hates mankind so much. Also, I like the way you use short paragraphs and sparse description. It keeps ...
Oct 4, 2007 -
Re: Ode to Burnt Toast
Aw, too bad. I LIKE burnt toast!
Oct 2, 2007 -
Re: We Are Three
Do NOT make this longer! I love it the way it is. It left me with a beautifully-creepy, almost giddy feeling. The tone is perfect; the voice alone conjures the ...
Sep 28, 2007 -
Re: Sandwich
KABOOM! That hit me like a stampeding herd chickens! (?) Anyway, talk about mega-moral going on. It doesn't matter that the imagery isn't bursting with colorful metaphors; in fact, it's ...
Sep 26, 2007 -
Re: Water
Strangely beautiful. Simple, yet packs a punch. Full of sharp imagery and emotion. I don't have any complaints about this poem. Keep up the good work!
Sep 23, 2007 -
Re: Look Inside
Ooh, Bravo! Thank GOD; I finally found a short love poem with non-cliche imagery. I only have one suggestion. In the first line, change the comma to an elipses or ...
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: only human
This is really good. I think you should break it up into two stanzas. You have a good theme going, and you could easily make this poem longer. Also, the ...
May 10, 2007 -
Re: My Random, bored haikus
OMG! You should publish a book of these! I think you've just started a fad of random haikus. Seriously, I love them. Write more.
May 10, 2007